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  1. #1
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    Jan 2009
    pakenham, victoria
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    my maid of honour speech, your thoughts?

    ok guys i went against the traditional and made a poem for the happy couple, please give me your honest opinions as i dont think i've ever written a poem in my life!!!

    Scott and sams tale is one for the ages
    A tale most worthy of a love stories pages
    They met in a pub, with the lights so dim
    He was perfect for her and she even more perfect for him
    They did their dance and went through the motions
    And what they created was better than the strongest of potions
    He flew to Italy and it was more than she could bare
    So she occupied her mind and found a house they could share
    He came home with a grin he couldn?t hide
    And one night over dinner asked her to be his beautiful bride
    So here we are with all your loved ones by your side
    Each and every heart so full of pride
    Your love for each other is so true and so pure
    A love for a lifetime that?s sure to endure
    So to end this poem i just want to say
    We?re all so happy for you in every single way

    is there anything u would word differently, or change completely, im not 100% happy with the last 2 lines
    Last edited by skybie; February 17th, 2009 at 12:04 PM.

  2. #2
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    Feb 2009
    In the poor house...
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    I think you have done a great job !

    I would never be able to come up with something like that - well done !


  3. #3
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    Feb 2007
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    Skye I think it is great. Your very clever.

  4. #4
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    Aug 2007
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    100% perfect!
    Very nice - they will love it! as a gift u could even get it printed out and framed!

  5. #5
    BellyBelly Member

    Mar 2007
    Perth
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    Hey I think the last two lines are beautiful. Well done!

  6. #6
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    Mar 2008
    In the darkroom
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    That is absolutely gorgeous hun! There won't be a dry eye in the house!

    Well done I wouldn't change a thing!