I would say it looked good.

Just one thing. You want to help women? Empower them? Educate them?

You're not cut out to be a midwife, love. A positive part of someone's pregnancy? You should say "I love hospital policy and want to push that over and above everything else, treating women as a number and attempting to contribute to the growing PND level in this country."

There you go, model midwife material - in my experience in hospital, that is.