HELP - 50 words mini romance for library comp :P

[~ Zarava Flutterby ~]

Library has a comp running at the moment for a short piece of writing, must be 50 words exactly, story must be a mini romance - set in the world of liraries or books and complete in itself.

So i've been playing and am by no means actually any good at it BUT what do you think.. criticism needed....

He's a self confessed bookworm, she's the latest IT girl.
What was she doing here, in his library?
He pointed and joked, "Mills and Boon are THAT way".
He heard her mutter to herself “never judge a book by it's cover”.
He knew then it was love at first site.


It's REALLY hard to keep to exactly 50 words, thinking about it now it's pretty crap.. but oh well i gave it a shot.. i might enter it anyway and see how i go.. what do you lovely ppl's think?

[AnyDream]

Love it! You've done well. One suggestion - maybe italicise 'THAT', instead of capping. I know you want the emphasis but it kind of hangs out like a skyscraper in such a short piece LOL. If it's a librarian judging they will *love* the pointing reference, it's a kind of librarian in-joke.

[~ Zarava Flutterby ~]

Love it! You've done well. One suggestion - maybe italicise 'THAT', instead of capping. I know you want the emphasis but it kind of hangs out like a skyscraper in such a short piece LOL. If it's a librarian judging they will *love* the pointing reference, it's a kind of librarian in-joke.

Thanks hun, also they give you a form to write it down on, do you think it's fine to print it out and staple to the form or should i handwrite it?

[~ Zarava Flutterby ~]

Oops and it should be SIGHT not SITE right... lol at yes the internet does confuse us

[AnyDream]

I would hand write it best you can and include some cute little illustrations if it's within your capability. It's the details that will win it or not. for eg, eldest DD won a comp, it was draw yourself ala Diary of a wimpy kid, she drew herself holding a copy of the book. winner!

[~ Zarava Flutterby ~]

Thanks hun, your a legend, might just jot it down pop it in and hope for the best.. i don't expect to win but it made my brain work a little

[~ Zarava Flutterby ~]

I just got a call from the library and guess what.............................................. .......





























I WON !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

They had over 40 entries over the shire and they picked mine!
I still can't believe it, i won a $75 Big W voucher.