How do i know if its any good?

[delphmoon]

Hmmm. I need sone inspiration for DTD tonight..... Fancy some more feedback?


Sent from my iPhone using Tapatalk so lots of errors hehe.

[appletree]

Serious Delphmoon? I will PM you.

[briggsy's girl]

i'm happy to give it a read - i've written a few different things at different time - from soft teasing to pretty descriptive stuff - so i can give you some feedback too if you want.

[delphmoon]

Thanks Apple...classy and stylish writing. I enjoyed the intensity

[LionsandBears]

I'm happy to give feedback. It would be good to know the context though. As BG said, each scene needs to fit in with the overall story.

[appletree]

Thanks delphmoon!

BG and L&B its pretty much a guy likes girl, girl likes guy, tension builds, a few things get in their way, some more tension builds until they get together kind of story. This scene obviously being the bit where they get together. To be honest though, it really is quite 'intense' as delphmoon kindly described. If you are ok with this let me know and i will PM it too you

[briggsy's girl]

hehehehe i don't think there's anything that would be too intense for me lol