Okay - 2 points - one specific - the other general -
Specifically - this part has repetitive unnecessary phrasing which I find a bit distracting/confusing -
"I am more than happy to provide a biodegradable nappy sack for each nappy and a nappy bucket with a sealed lid to avoid any additional contact with the nappies, avoiding any additional contact with the nappies, when another nappy is added to the bucket."

And the general one, I think maybe when you mention the difference between the old style cloth referred to in their guidelines and mcns, maybe you could mention that most mcns have an elasticised leg similar to disposables, which reduce the chance of leakage as compared to the flat-style. Maybe you could offer to only use AIO, AI2, pockets, etc, rather than prefolds with covers?

Otherwise it's great - good on you for fighting for your child's right to have a fluffy butt!!