Help needed with a short poem please!

[Danni]

I am trying to write poems for Masons god parents to have printed onto candles for his christening.

This is what I have written for his godmother:

I want you to know how lucky I feel
To have a godmother like you
Someone who will always love me
no matter what I do

Thank you for always being there
And watching me as I grow
You are certainly very special to me
Much more than you'll ever know.

Love Always, Mason

What do you think?

Now I need to write something for his godfather and I am stumped! I kinda wanted to stear away from the lovey dovey bits iykwim?

Any advice would be great

[mrsmac]

Maybe something about the qualities of a godfather, look up to him as he grows up, play footie with - will think more on this and get back to you!

[MantaRay]

Ok, just did this really quickly, but how about something light, but nice like:

Thank you for taking on this role
and being my God-dad
I know you'll do the job so well
And teach me good from bad.

As I grow up you'll play with me
And we'll have lots of fun
I really am a lucky lad
Because I am your God son.

[westy]

Awww Danni ,that is beautiful i'm sure Mason's godmother will treasure that forever.

[Danni]

oh mel that is great! Im a bit funny about the god-dad bit. Off to ponder though

[Danni]

OK guys, let me know what you HONESTLY think!

I want you to know how lucky I feel
to have a godmother like you
someone who will always love me
no matter what I do

Thank you for always being there
and watching me as I grow
You are certainly very special to me
much more than you'll ever know

Love Always, Mason


Thank you for being my god father,
And for looking out for me,
I know you'll do such a great job
And be the best that you can be


As I grow up you'll play with me
And we'll have lots of fun
I really am a lucky boy
Because I am your God son.

Love Always, Mason

[MrsFabuloso]

Thy're great Danni, and not too mushy! I've been trying to do one for father's day but I just can't get there...

[Michelle71]

Danni - they are beautiful. Great work!!

[MantaRay]

Love them Danni. Well done.

[Pandora]

I think they're both really nice Danni!

[Danni]

Thanks guys!

Kellie: google some poems and change some words and it will give you an idea on rhyming. It doesnt help when youre a new mum and your brain is a bit mushy