I think the poems are cool - I think it is great to ask for money if that is what they want, and I applaud anything that results in less 'stuff' in the world so holidays are great.

We had some friends use a site where basically they set up a list of things for their honeymoon and then you contributed money towards them - at the end of the day they just get the money so could if they wanted blow it on pub and pokies (in my mind if that is what they want to do with it so be it) but it showed a bit more of what the honeymoon would be like so you could contribute accordingly. But say their honeymoon was in Portugal it would have a list of things including flight/accommodation etc you could 'contribute' towards but also things like 'relaxing massage' or 'parachute jump' or 'bottle of champagne and roses' etc etc so meant you could choose to put your money against whatever you thought suited you and your relationship with the couple the best.

That was fun, but probably some work to set up and no doubt the site gets some money for it - so I think the poems are great (particularly the second one which doesn't actually 'ask' for anything)

For re-wording - How about

"We are lucky enough to have set up our home, therefore we would truly appreciate any contribution so that we may enjoy a honeymoon a little later in the year. There will be a wishing well at the reception to receive your well wishes. Alternatively, XXXXX has a list with a few gift ideas and may be contacted on xxxxxx"