Is this ok... Need advice

[SugarDust]

I need to attach a cover letter to an application i need to submit ASAP

what do you think of this...
could you give me any advice on it if it needs changing or re wording???

To whom it may concern,
My name is Melanie R*********s and I?m a mother of 3 children. I am writing in response to the job advertised for Retail Assistants at your Caroline Springs store. I have many years experience in all aspects of retail, from customer service to stock replenishment, cash handling to supervision.

I have been out of the work force for the past 4 years due to having a family, but I do believe that I am an excellent candidate for this job as I have 6 years experience in retail customer service. As outlined in my resume and have undertaken many roles in regards to customer service in a retail environment.

I look forward to hearing from you in regards to my application.

Sincerly,
Melanie R*********s

Any advice would be great!