Wrote this for Milana - what do you think?

[BabyButterfly]

Hi all,

Wasn't sure where to post this, just wrote this in memory of Milana, wanted the poem to start with the initials from her name. Planning on using an illustrated font for the first letters in each line and then adding a few pretty gifs and stuff, so I can frame it.
Not sure if it sounds right though, what do you think. I wrote it while I was sat in Emergency with my 4 year old the other night.

MILANA MATILDA ROSE

My dreams came true, I was pregnant with you,
I planned out your life, our special moments.
Life was going to be perfect, as our family grew,
Always in my thoughts, each day and night.
New hopes and dreams, that I planned to come true,
Age was going to be, each milestone met.

Minutes were so short, when the time came,
Age was not met, it was given away.
Time ran so slow, the rush around us seemed to gain,
I prayed you would be well, that we would meet soon.
Losing you wasn't real, you were for keeps,
Did life have to be cruel, could there be so much pain.
A new world without you, it was not meant to be.

Reason escapes me, but you are with me each day,
Only in my heart not my arms, as it should be.
Special memories of my precious daughter, is the only way,
Eternally my beautiful butterfly, fly free in my thoughts.

Any ideas for bits that don't sound quite right appreciated,

[ubba82]

I think the poem is beautiful just the way you wrote it. They are your words and reflect your feelings. I wouldnt change 1 single word.

xx

[kitten2b]

it is beautiful Tracey I wouldn't change any words

[Just Me]

Perfect. I wouldn't change anything. Thanks for sharing

[~Kim~]

It's beautiful Tracey.
Gave me goosebumps.

[Phteven]

What a beautiful gift for your little angel.
They're your words, straight from your heart - I don't think anyone could improve on them

[diannescruffy]

Tracey, what a beautiful special poem for your very special angel. I wouldn't change a thing. Thank you so much for sharing with us.

Regards,
Dianne

[AliBaby]

It is beautiful Tracey. I know Milana would think the same. Your words are so heartfelt and meaningful.

I hope your 4 yr old is okay now.

[Visitor8]

I think it's beautiful. Your an amazing strong woman to go through that.

Hope your 4 year old is better.

[BrightSparkles]

I love it hun. I wouldn't changed any part of it!
xx

[Kazbah]

It's beautiful Tracey, thanks for sharing.

I wouldn't change anything, it's from your heart and that says more than anything else.

[shellbell3]

Its brought tears to my eyes, I wouldn't change it, I can feel it coming straight from the heart.

[Nai]

It brought tears to my eyes - I wouldn't change a thing!

[diva det]

Its perfect hun- beautiful words hun
hugs

[BabyButterfly]

hi
thanks ladies. Could have wrote a fair few poems while sat in the waiting room in emergency (5 hours).
My daughter had Concussion following a head Injury at playgroup, she was vomitting everywhere and still we were in the waiting room for several hours. She is OK now though.

[Cassius2]

I think the poem is beautiful. I wouldn't change a thing, it comes from a place deep within and is a special bond between you and Milana. It's truly beautiful.

Can't believe the wait times in emergency for concussion!

[Tiff+2]

The poem is perfect, just the way you wrote it. The words are so meaningful and beautiful.

[~Kaz~]

Your words are beautiful Tracey - just like Milana was. Your poem made me cry. Don't change anything.

I still think of you and Milana all the time darl xxx